In one paragraph, you will summarize the historical time period or event that you have researched so far.
In your paragraph, be sure to include:
- at least two specific details from your notes to help you summarize the historical time period or event,
- a lesson that you think can be learned from the historical time period or event and applied to the future, one that is supported by the two details you include, and
- proper spelling, punctuation and grammar.
The historical event Titanic impacted many people from the moment it was struck. Over time it has come to be known as the worst shipwreck of all time. Titanic was claimed "unsinkable" and people said "not even god himself can sink this ship." Titanic was the biggest ship in the world at the time that would sail across the Atlantic Ocean. A safety drill was supposed to happen in case the ship sank before it set sail but was canceled. After the titanic hit the iceberg it sank less than 3 hours later. As the realization occurred that the ship would sink, the first life boat was launched. It carried 27 people when it could carry 65. This led to many more people dying than it would have. 1,500 of the 2,200 passengers died that day. Only about 750 people were rescued from life boats. The Carpathia came two hours after the Titanic sank. A lesson I have learned from this is to always put safety first and be prepared for the worst.
ReplyDeleteI think a good main conflict would be the fact that the survivors always have to remember the people that died.
DeleteA conflict could be the ship sinking
DeleteYou have lots of details and facts, but not a lot of feeling. You should make your main conflict with the people and how the people reacted to it, not all facts.
DeleteI think your character should be a passenger on the ship. Also I think they should have a lot of emotion.
DeleteThe topic of my Historical Fiction essay is the Second Sino-Japanese war. This happened during 1937-1945 which is also during WWII. Japan had invaded China in hopes of taking over. The lesson I think could be learned from the moment in history is that people with power will tend to abuse it. Japan had power and misused it. General Matsui Iwane led the troops in the Nanjing Massacre. Nanjing was at the time the capital of China. Iwane was the person who ordered the massacre. He had much power in the Japanese army. When arriving at Nanjing, the troops killed about 100,000-300,000 innocent civilians. This is proof of the abuse of power. Japan abused their powers and killed many innocent people who did nothing wrong. The war would have never occurred if people did not abuse their power. Even if this lesson may not seem important today it is still something to know and understand. Abusing power can lead to terrible things. It may not cause a whole war but it can lead to terrible consequences.
ReplyDeleteMy suggestion for the main conflict is one of the troops having to deal with what they did and regretting it deeply.
DeleteMy suggestion for the creation of a main character is being quiet as a reaction from the event. Their emotions could also be subtle too.
DeleteA suggestion for you would be, to create a character who is in Nanjing. You can add some behavior to the character, to bring it more to life.
DeleteJanuary 28th 1986 the time was 9:10am and the countdown started. Everyone in the crowd was anticipating to hear the words liftoff echo through the whole entire state of florida. Unexpectedly the counter paused, The silence in the crowd was loud. After a little while we were told that the liftoff was delayed since there was a small malfunction found, everyone was disappointed but glad that they found the problem before they let the shuttle go to space with all seven crew members on board.
ReplyDeleteAfter two hours of waiting, they were finally able to start the lift off at 11:38am… “10 seconds to lift off… Nine, Eight, Seven, Six, Five, Four, Three, Two, One. Lift off” Everyone went quiet, hearing the loud booming from the space shuttle. Everything seemed completely normal, The crew was still connected to Nasa, which gave them the power to communicate. Everyone was watching closely… the first bolt of red and orange clouds of fire exploded.. Then the next few.. And then the space shuttle fell. 73 seconds after liftoff the world went quiet.
the emotions of the people who watched the space shuttle would be could to help create a main character
DeleteI think you should add more behavior of the characters.
DeleteI think you should show what the character is feeling about the delay.Also i think you should tell what their faces looked like after it went quiet.
DeleteFrom the Great Depression we learned that it was a downturn in history. We can also infer how hard it must have been on the poor people who 1-had to go through this. 2-lost their job. 3- lost lots of money. I could keep going on reasons why no one would want to go through this period of time. As we know, our life that we are living right now, is kind of falling apart. I mean the news is just filled with reasons to support this. Do you think we will have another Great Depression? More importantly, how would you feel if you were one of those people alive during the Great Depression? I would have been very scared, sad, and well, depressed. Just think, family income was around $1,500-$2,300 per year. Your parents probably spend more than that in a month today. Plus, there were so many deaths. Imagine this, you’re walking down the street and you see people weeping, screaming, yelling, and lots of people sleeping on the street because they didn’t have enough money to afford their home. Again, how would you feel if this were you? The main lesson that we can learn from the Great Depression is to be grateful for what you have because you never know when the last time you will have it. Do you think that the people who had a home one day, thought that the next day, they would be spending the night on the streets?
ReplyDeleteA suggestion i have for a main conflict is that you have a great amount of detail but not enough to bring it to life.
DeleteOne way I make main characters is thinking of what is going to affect them. Like in the great depression you could do a man that loses his job, and is poor. Something to help develop a character is describe their appearance and add detailed emotions.
DeleteYou gave a lot of detail, and explained very well. But definetley a lot of info that should be spread out more in the story.
DeleteUnemployment increased by 25% which means that 15 million US citizens were unemployed at this time.
Delete9/11 was a very big incident that happened on September 11, 2001. Two planes crashed into the North and South tower. Two more planes crashed in different planes. The third plane crashed in the Pentagon and the last plane crashed in Pennsylvania. Almost 3,000 people died. Many other people went missing after 9/11. Many missing posters were hung up all over New York City. The security at the airport doubled so these types of incidents won't happen again. The leader of this mission (Osama bin Laden) wanted to crash the four planes into the USA’s symbols. But his plan was unsuccessful, thankfully. A $25 million bounty was hired to find Osama bin Laden. It took 9 months to fix all of 9/11’s damage. Many people died from inhaling the dust caused from the crashes.
ReplyDeleteI think the main conflict of this is the fact two of the planes hit one of the USA's symbols.The us had to fix all the damages taking up to 9 months to fix.(The towers that somewhat represented the USA).
Delete!, I think a main conflict of this could be the planes crashing into the towers and the damage done due to it. You could also use how it took so long to build the towers and it got destroyed.
DeleteMaybe a survivor of 9/11 maybe they could act irrationally. And they were in an orphanage and their best-friend from the orphanage didn't make it. The survivor thinking there only purpose was to be with their best-friend you could have another character come into place that character being empathetic, caring, understanding, etc. You could describe them as maybe looking down not wanting to get out of bed.
Deletei like this story !! , but u need a character. maybe talk about someone who survived the crash!!
DeleteThe Black plague was one of the biggest bubonic plagues in history and we can learn many lessons after this big event. And when I say event, I mean, all hell broke loose. A big lesson is how preparation is KEY for times like these. Europe's population was not ready for this. They lost 75-200 million people to the plague. Because of this, they had to figure out a way to deal with all of the bodies. Instead of making single graves, they make bigger graves, having multiple people in a grave. It sounds weird, but it worked! It probably was better if they thought of this before, but it worked!
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DeleteFor your story you could put it into the perspective of a grave digger. Having to bury his friends and family due to the plague. But then he has and idea to bury more than one body in one grave. With this idea he says europe from the black plague and becomes a hero with the lesson being of ingenuity and mourning the loss of others.
Asher, i think that a main character you could make is you could talk about appearance,conversations,behavior ect. that is my suggestion and that could be best for you. good luck Asher ;) - andrew
DeleteASHER!! I like the info about the bubonic plague, and i think its a great setting. You also have enough info for it to work
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ReplyDeleteThe Holocaust was a mass murder of millions of Jewish people living in Europe. This event was led by Hitler and the Nazis. Hitler was a supreme ruler of Germany after the recent one had died. The only way you would be killed in this period of time is if you lived in Germany or anywhere near Germany and if you were Jewish. Hitler was obsessed with the idea of a “pure” German race. He believed that Jews were the reason for defeat in WWI. Most people have heard of Anne Frank, a young jewish girl that grew up in germany during the Holocaust, Lived in a secret house, and kept a journal throughout the years that she lived before she was sadly killed in a concentration camp in 1945. Many rumors throughout the Holocaust years spread all over the world. The murder started in 1933 when Hitler became in power and ended 12 long years after. Many people that were Jewish were sent to concentration camps. A famous camp was called Auschwitz. Auschwitz was located in Germany and many people there were either killed from starvation, dehydration, sicknesses or just plain killed by the people working in the camps. The Holocaust was a serious, depressing time and that should never happen again, so let people be different, and you are different with them because no one is the same.
A main conflict in your writing could be, Hitler and how he mistreated people. I love your message, nice paragraph.
DeleteYour main conflict could be on how the people in the camps were treated.
DeleteI think the main conflict could be: Hitler; and how he treated people the way he did. Nice paragraph!
DeleteOn April 15, 1912 The Titanic known as “The Unsinkable Ship” suddenly became “The Sinkable Ship.” The Titanic was built with only half of the lifeboats needed because if there were too many, they would crowd the decks. First class members got decks higher up on the ship. That caused the first class members 44% more likely to survive than second and third class members. Very early in the morning the ship struck an iceberg and within 2 hours 1,500 lives were lost. The lives were lost because of the very few lifeboats and very low decks making it harder for people to escape. Something I learned from the sinking of the Titanic is that you should always be prepared, and you never know what might happen next.
ReplyDeleteI think your main conflict is ok, but I think you should focus more on how the sinking process happened and what really happened as your main conflict.
DeleteI think you should add that nothing is going to be perfect so always plan on the worst thing that could happen, so you're always going to be ready or prepared, like you said.
DeleteWhen the sinking of the Titanic starts to happen you should really show the characters behavior and emotions, so as the reader it will almost feel like you're in the story.
DeleteI think you could add a little bit of the look and sound of emotions throughout the sinking of the ship. I think it would really bring out the story and how people felt as the ship was sinking.
DeleteThe Dream Team was an olympic team in 1992 and they were a really good team that won the gold metal in the olympics. The had a lot of stars on their team such as Micheal Jordan, Magic Johnson, Charles Barkley, Karl Malone, and Patrick Ewing. There was many more really big stars on top of that but that was just the starting 5. They were lead by coach Chuck Daley. A lesson about this team would definitely be to never give up because they didn’t and went off and won it all. Every game they played they would beat a team by an average of 44 points. So they got put in group A which is like the best of the best. Years before that team was assembled USA kept loosing over and over every year. But they didn’t let it get to them and absolutely steamrolled every team and won the gold medal.
ReplyDeleteI think that there should be conflict between the two players. Since they are on different teams in the NBA and may not like each other.
DeleteThis explains a lot, but you should focus more on one part of the topic for a couple of sentences and then transfer to another part. Other than that I can't think of any main conflicts. There are some minor spelling errors, such as the start of the second sentence, and more
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DeleteFor a main Character you should focus on Chuck Daley the coach. He could be shown not getting credit for the work for the team and him not caring. his behavior would show him almost being like a father figure to the dream team. With them looking up to him for advice off and on the olympics. Chuck would be patient and would show empathy to the players getting them through their highs and lows.
I think one way to make your characters come alive is by making showing their feeling through both dialogue between each other and their thoughts throughout the games.
DeleteSeptember 11 2001 was a groundbreaking day in america. The whole world got shook up by what happened on that day. It was a brisk early morning in downtown New York. Around 8:45 is when tragedy struck, A plane that was in flight heading to San Francisco was hijacked. The plane in the blink of an eye hit tower one of the world trade centers. Plane 93 of a boeing 757 was the hijacked plane. New York was in demise, something that would never even cross your mind just occurred. To add insult to injury another plane struck tower two. More than 3,200 children had lost one or two of their parents in that very short time span. Osama Bin Laden was responsible for these attacks. Another plane was headed for the military base but crashed in a field in D.C. This was headed for the pentagon. Firemen and Women rushed to try and stop the misery.
ReplyDeletethis is good but i think the main conflict is the plane getting hijacked
DeleteQuintilius, your portrayal of 9/11 really made me feel like i was there, with the survivors. Your last sentence really made it sound like people were in pain
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DeleteFor a main character i think you could use someone outside the building talking to someone, and then a huge reaction to the plane crashing into the twin towers.
DeleteThe Shot Heard Around the World, a smaller part of the Battle of Lexington and Concord, was a major turning point in American history. It started off the American Revolution, and it started the Revolution off with an American win. Something can be learned from the performance of the British during this battle. The thing that can be learned is the life lesson to never underestimate your enemy, to not “judge a book by its cover”. A detail to support this lesson is the casualties of the battle. When the dust cleared and the battle had ended, there were an estimated 93 American and 300 British casualties; it was an American win. Because of the underpreparedness of the British, they lost more men than the lesser-trained Americans. Another detail to support the life lesson is that 200 of the Redcoats (a term for British soldiers) died because they were taken by surprise by American minutemen, showing how they underestimated the Americans. A third and final detail to support the life lesson is how the Americans had a warning system. Lanterns would be hung in the steeple of Boston’s Old North Church as a signal to warn the other patriots, a warning system which the British didn’t think the Americans would have. Because of the Royal Army (British army)’s lack of preparations due to unfairly judging the strength of the American soldiers, the British lost the battle, which gave the American soldiers the morale boost they needed to win the war. To conclude, never underestimate your enemy. You never know when they might be just a bit more prepared than you.
ReplyDeletea main conflict could be that when the shot heard around the world goes off, and all the people were scared of what was going to happen next.
DeleteIn your story the main character could be written with behavior and conversation. They would both be good describing how your character acts during the war.
DeleteThe Berlin wall was constructed in 1961 separating east and west Berlin. In east Berlin they said that it was intended to keep all the western fascists out but really was intended to keep east Berliners in because many were defecting to the west. If you were in east Berlin and you tried to jump the wall guards were ordered to shoot on sight. The wall came down in 1989 when Günter Schabowski, an East German politician accidentally said that anyone can cross the border at any time. People started flocking to the wall. The wall started to be dismembered and in 1990 the wall was officially destroyed and Germany was reunified.
ReplyDeleteI have some photos from the wall if you are at all intersted in seeing them for your story.
DeleteI think you should add more info to the conflict you have now.
DeleteDuckmasterTheo!, your description of the berlin wall is great. You also have a lot of facts.
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DeleteI think a great Main Character would be a shooter guarding the berlin wall. Except he has a moral dilemma when his brother is the one who wants to cross the wall. He then has to decide what's more important to him his brother or his country. He has to spend hours on end thinking about what to do. Only for him to go insane from the choice and end up K#lling himself with his dead corpse found by his brother the next day who then takes his job in honor of his brother.
Over four hundred thousand people worked on Apollo 11. Each one of them wanted to complete President Kennedy’s mission of landing a person on the moon, but they knew something grim was impelling to happen, so they prepared two years in advance for that very moment. Because of this, they released the Gemini program, performed rocket preparations from November of 1968 to June of 1969, and learned and premeditated from all the Apollo missions beforehand just to be disposed to elucidate any dilemma that comes in their way.
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DeleteAlso its possible your main conflict will be how they get to the moon.
DeleteI think to make your story have main characters that come alive is showing conversations with other character. Like, what they are saying from ground control center to what they are talking about with each other while on the ship.
DeleteI think that making the main character come alive would be with conversation. It could show how they feel about what they are doing and how they act with other people.
DeleteDo you ever think about past wars and think that you could never learn something from it? This is not true we can learn many lessons from them. For example, a lesson that can be learned from the American Revolution is that you should be grateful for what you have and not take advantage of it. When British kept heavily abusing what they had and over taxing American colonists. When Britian did this they took advantage of the power the had over them and this caused them to lose that power after the war. If British had been grateful that they still had power over the American, and not heavily taxed them they would still have alliances there. This is one lesson that we can apply to our lifes from the past. If we appreciate what we have, and not try to take advantage and get more, your life will be much better.
ReplyDeletei like it but i think the main conflict is how they kept abusing and over taxing the colonists
DeleteI think the main conflict could be, how the British were abusing the power they had. Overall, nice paragraph.
DeleteI think that you could add maybe a couple of conversations between the British and Americans to really show how they feel.
DeleteI think for a main character you could add some Dialogue and narrations between the americans and britain. Such as what they are wearing, and how they talk.
DeleteI think the main conflict for your story could be; when the British were abusing the power they had.
DeleteNatalie D- The Titanic was a ship that was said to be unsinkable. Is that really true?
ReplyDeleteThe Titanic hit the iceberg on April 14, 1912 at midnight. Everyone on the ship thought that they missed the iceberg until someone that was at the bottom came running yelling we’ve been hit. The water game gushed in from the side it had been hit. Filling up the whole bottom and the ship slowly began to split in half. Not so unsinkable anymore. The Titanic had flown right through the danger zone and even worse it was a cloudy night with no moon and a calm sea. So they had no clue until they were too close that there was an iceberg that was going to kill half of the people on the ship. I think the lesson that can be learned from this event is to always be prepared. I think this because they thought that the Titanic was unsinkable, but how would they know that if the place it was built and the place where they started from that it could survive that kind of hit. It was never tested for anything like that so they weren’t prepared for it. That's why I think that the lesson is to always be prepared.
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DeleteI think a good conflict would be adding how people had to get on the little boats to get off the ship before it went down.
DeleteI think the conflict should be on what happened to the sailor driving the boat and why it crashed into the iceberg.
DeleteI think you should add a lot on how the characters reacted, and if there were any survivors, you should add on how they probably thought they were going to die too. Other than adding on the emotions and reactions I think your story will be good.
DeleteThe Titanic sank in the north atlantic ocean in 1912. It was headed to its maiden voyage from Southampton to New York city. The Titanic set sail on April 10, 1912. There were over 2,200 passengers and crew members on board. On the night April 14 the Titanic hit an iceberg and started to sink. Only the first class passengers could exit the ship before it sank. over 1,500 people are resulting in death. The Titanic sank near the off coast of NewFoundLand in the north atlantic. There were only enough lifeboats.
ReplyDeleteI think a possible main conflict for this story is when the people are trying to get off the boat. Like, when they are going to get on a lifeboat to save their lives and who gets on first and who gets on last.
DeleteI think you gave too many details about where the Titanic was going and that took away from the main conflict. Your main conflict should how the ship sank and how it made people feel.
DeleteI like how you have details about the titanic and how it sunk. The info really helps the story
DeleteThis pretty good. Its possible the main character could be a little kid on the ship.
DeleteA main character idea for your story can be the way that they act on the Titanic, and how they act when the Titanic hit the iceberg.
DeleteThe French and Indian War was a major conflict fought between the French and British empires in North America during the 1750s. One important lesson we can learn from this war is the importance of cooperation and alliances. The British were successful in defeating the French largely due to the support they received from their Native American allies. This shows us that it is often better to work together and form alliances with others, rather than trying to go it alone. By working together with others, we can achieve greater success and overcome obstacles that might be too difficult to overcome on our own. This is a valuable lesson that can apply not just to wars, but to many areas of life where cooperation and teamwork are crucial to success.
ReplyDeleteOne way to help develop the main character is to describe things that happened in the past and how it made the main character feel.
DeleteI really like this but the only thing i will say is i think you can add a little more detail for the war with the french and indian, but overall great story!
DeleteAND if i was doing the french and indian war, I might of done a chief of a native american tribe or a soldier in the war
DeleteThe holocaust was a dark and scary time for people. Jew were thrown out of their homes and had to go somewhere where they didn’t know. They couldn’t escape the concentration camps. People hand to where a yellow star of david on them to symbolize that they were jewish people. Hitler had an idea that the nazi’s would tourcher the jew till they die; One way that they torched the jew was putting them in a gas room until they died. The jews were not welcome into the German community; their shops were broken into in 1933 and in 1945 the jew were freed from hitler’s torcher.
ReplyDeleteI think you should add the clothing they wore and their emotions.
DeleteYour main conflict could be on people trying to get out of the camps.
Delete9/11 had a big impact on America. This terrorist attack frightened many people across the world. This tragic event happened on September 11th 2001. Four planes were hijacked that day, two of them were set to crash into the twin towers. One of the other planes crashed into the Pentagon in Arlington, Virginia. The other one crashed in a field in Shanksville. 19 terrorists from Saudi Arabia and other Arab nations got away with smuggling knives and box cutters.These hijackers caused the plane to crash into the twin towers. Almost 3000 people died from this attack. The reason for this is because there was not enough security to prevent the smuggling of weapons. If there was enough security this could be easily prevented. Innocent people were killed because of the lack of security which shows how important security is.
ReplyDeleteWhen you are writing your story make sure you add those details that there weren't just the two planes that crashed into the Twin Towers, add the other two too.
DeleteMy suggestion for a main conflict is that the people that went through that event have to deal with their memories of the event.
DeleteYou have very good details, but your main focus needs more feeling and emotions. Make the reader feel something about what happened on 9/11.
DeleteThe dust bowl was a significant turning point in American history. The dust bowl was a very dark time for all Americans, and many lost everything they had. Over 300,000 people fled to California, being told it was the "promised land," and well over 2.5 million left dust bowl states. After millions were promised hundreds of acres of land in return for farming, the wheat supply skyrocketed, making wheat worth less. Then, when farmers could not turn a profit, the fields were left to dry up. At the same time, the rain stopped falling, causing the fields to become extremely dry. This was when the dust bowl started. Millions of tons of dirt were lifted, covering everything on site. Eventually, after years, the dust bowl ended. A lesson that can be learned from the dust bowl is don't believe everything. If it seems too good to be true, it probably is.
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DeleteWhat you could do is write about a wealthy man who goes to the promised lands out of greed pushing family and friends away to get there. But when he finally does he ends up going bankrupt due to the overflow of wheat with the lesson being about greed and wealth.
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DeleteIn early June of 1944, The allied forces attempted to take Normandy, France from Nazi Germany. The Allied forces consisted of North America and Britain. The allies targeted five beaches in Normandy, France. The beaches the US attacked were codenamed Utah and Omaha, the beaches farthest west. Canada had one beach which was codenamed Juno, The beach in the center of both of Britain's beaches Gold and Sword. More than 3000 soldiers lost their lives on Omaha beach while out of the 20000 sent to Utah, only 300 lost their lives. Canada sent 14000 soldiers to Juno. Out of the 14000 sent only 1000 died. The Britain beach Sword was the most valuable because it would have been the easiest to attack the other beaches if British soldiers failed to take it.
ReplyDeleteMany people on d-day showed to never give up as they were fighting their way up the beach.
DeleteI think a good main conflict would be the soldiers still fighting even though they know a lot of them have already died.
DeleteI think a possible main conflict is when they are fighting on the beach of Omaha, and I think you could really get into the fighting part.
DeleteI think, you should create a character in the British army. Give the character some feeling, and describe how they will look.
DeleteI think your character should be placed in the British Army. I also think you should add a lot of feelings to your character.
DeleteI think the main conflict of this is the fact two of the planes hit one of the USA's symbols.The us had to fix all the damages taking up to 9 months to fix.(The towers that somewhat represented the USA). Another main conflict was they had to spend more money on better security in airports.
ReplyDeleteA, I think a main conflict of your story can be about the Americans claiming the Native American land. The problems the americans had to claim it, and how the natives fought back to try and keep the land before losing it.
ReplyDeleteAmazing paragraph, i will say a conflict you could use is a tiny bit more detail in the lesson we can learn, maybe example ´ s ect. but overall amazing story!
ReplyDeleteThe main conflict is the towers getting hit. I think you could add another main conflict of what time they got hit too.
ReplyDeletegood story! , but your character needs more appearance maybe talk about there hair color!!!
ReplyDeleteI think you should show what your character is feeling while this is going on. I also think that you should show what your character does while all of this is happening.
ReplyDeleteI think your character should be someone who survived 9/11 but as surviving while they were running they felt traumatized seeing people on the ground some lifeless. Describe the characters feeling like saying things like, "They ran just barely making it out with dust in their face." Maybe something like that.
ReplyDeleteMy suggestions for the main character is a strict behavior based on the torture they endured. They could also not be so expressive with their emotions out loud from fear of being punished.
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