Do you advise them often?” Jonas was a little frightened at the thought that one day he would be the one to advise the ruling body.
But the Giver said no. “Rarely. Only when they are faced with something that they have not experienced before. Then they call upon me to use the memories to advise them.” (103)
We study the past and its many memories in order to help make the right decisions for the future. What is one time period or event in American History that you think offers us a possible lesson for the future? In one paragraph:
- describe a time period or event in American History that you think could offer us lessons for the future,
- include details to describe the time period or event, and
- explain what you think we could learn for the future based on the history.
A great example of a time that we can learn a lesson is during the revolutionary war. In the war the British overpowered the Americans by troops money and weapons. The political leaders were inexperienced and they had a voluminous disadvantage. The Americans never gave up and the eventually won the war. Another lesson that we can learn from the revolutionary war is to treat others the way you want to be treated. Great Britain used the colonies as a source of resources by taxing them and mercantilism. The british made it so that they can only trade with them, and they also took their resources and sold the products back to them. But the plan backfired and the colonies started to rebel, and turned to a war.
ReplyDeleteKenny, one suggestion for a story I have is that you could have a man who just turned 18 when the war started and they force him to serve, they as in the colonists government, and he is scared as heck about being in a war. Another suggestion is that you can have a man who wants to serve in the war for his independence and at the end you can have him be shot without coming out and saying "and then he was shot."
DeleteMaybe for your story you can be from the perspective of the other side. Fighting against America to get another side of the story that is barely ever told. I think that the way you started this paragraph is confusing, maybe try to start off with something more clear. When you start you don't know what time period your talking about but you write it like we do.
DeleteMaybe for your story you can be from the perspective of the other side. Fighting against America to get another side of the story that is barely ever told. I think that the way you started this paragraph is confusing, maybe try to start off with something more clear. When you start you don't know what time period your talking about but you write it like we do.
DeleteYou should use first person narration to describe your character's feelings during the revolutionary war. You should also include multiple settings for your time period.
DeleteYou’ve heard of the Fourth Of July, right? There’s fireworks, bonfires, swimming, and the smell of glorious food at a cookout. It is fun, yes, but do you know the importance behind The Fourth of July?
ReplyDeleteNo? Well, let me tell you about it.
The Fourth of July is the day America was considered, er...born, an independent nation with no rules under the british law. We became free that day as a self governed nation.
We earned sovereignty.
Those men had bravery and determination for what they fought for. Heck, they were eating the leather out of their boots because they had no food!
The Revolutionary war was a very big thing, it was the independence we had now. We have sovereignty because of The Revolutionary war, and the DOI.
So, we can all think to ourselves: Bravery and determination is the key in life.
You wanna know why?
Because these men used bravery and determination in order to get what we have now, right?
So, we can all interpret that bravery and determination will get us what we want.
Pretty good details on what was happening! But about the bravery and determination thing, you don't always have to use them to get what you need/want. So maybe that could be a good thing to add. And, you know some people like a good chuckle in these things sometimes. And you mostly did a good job with that. But, maybe just say considered or born separatly or get rid of one of them to make it make slightly more sense. Otherwise, nice job!
Delete1) You should explain what sovereignty is
Delete2) Your character could be a person who fought in the revolutionary war
3) I think you should use first person narration to highlight the thoughts of your character and give him/her/it the sort of personality you had in your paragraph
I think you should do 3rd person if you want to be multiple people like the writers, citizens, etc. Or you could do 1st person if you want to be a civilian or someone. But I recommend you being one of the citizens so readers would know ho someone felt about that day.
DeleteI think you should do 3rd person if you want to be multiple people like the writers, citizens, etc. Or you could do 1st person if you want to be a civilian or someone. But I recommend you being one of the citizens so readers would know ho someone felt about that day.
DeleteThe Attack on Pearl harbor was in December, 1941. The Japanese attacked the harbor. A submarine was spotted moving in swiftly to the harbor. The submarine was surprisingly not functioning correctly. So no one thought anything of the event at this point in time. Some American sailors spotted something coming through the white clouds. The sailors glanced at it very civilly. It was a japanese fighter plane. Then as the planes were coming from the sky torpedoes blasted into the ships near the harbor. The planes had dropped bombs among the harbor. This was a very tragic sight. Nearly 20 American ships had been destroyed and about 2000 people died. The thing is, no one was prepared for the attack. The lesson we learned from this is always be prepared.
ReplyDeleteJeff I suggest for your historical fiction you should do first person narration because you could say all the thoughts and emotions of your character. Also, I suggest that your setting be near the harbor when it's attacked.
DeleteJeffery-
Delete(some suggestions)
1. Try to do your piece in 2nd person. It might be easier that way (to focus on all the things that are happening in the event quickly).
2. If you are doing this in 2nd person, try to not just focus on facts of the event but also the character('s) emotions during this event.
3. Good lesson, but maybe in your piece make it more easier to infer. Maybe by making your character super prepared
Good Luck!
My 1st suggestion is that you can have your character to be a japanese bomber. My second suggestion is that at the end your character start to feel bad and try to help the U.S..
DeleteMy 1st suggestion is that you can have your character to be a japanese bomber. My second suggestion is that at the end your character start to feel bad and try to help the U.S..
DeleteWe look back at history and question why did this man do that, what did they do to him, that man is a monster but on the inside everyone's a monster you just have to be pushed to the limits. For example many people say that Hitler hated the jews caused his mother died under the care of a Jewish doctor. He was pushed to the limits going through curtain thing can change a person he watched his mother die under the care of a Jewish doctor and that made him hate the Jews but know one knows what really happened that is just what the majority think. If Hitler's mom would have died under the care of a German doctor would he hate the Germans? But the overall lesson is if you blame someone for a tragic event and never get over it then how will your life progress?
ReplyDeleteI think your story should be told in the first person of a Jewish person in a concentration camp. I also think you should include deatails about what it was like in the concentration camp.
DeleteI think the conflict your character should go through is being blamed. You should use first person so the readers can see how he/she feels about going through the conflict.
DeleteOne event we learned a lesson from in the past is the Vietnam war. In the Vietnam war the South Vietnamese were afraid to fall to communism or tyranny. they were having a war against the North Vietnamese which was for communism to try not to fall to full government rule. communism is the government that the government gets all of the power and the states get none, then tyranny is having one supreme ruler like a king. Us the Americans allied with south Vietnamese to help stop the spread of communism. In the Vietnam war we learned that democratic power unguarded turns to authoritarian tyranny. So in other words tyranny can overtake a democratic place that power is not unguarded which is why the Vietnamese were scared that they would fall to communism. So the lesson being to keep your government secure or that kind of stuff would happen. But other than that there wasn't much else we learned, the fact is that war is war. Maybe we learned small stuff from experience fighting but this is not one of those historical events where there was one large lesson.
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DeleteDaniel your paragrah is really good but please explain why the tyranny started.Give some datail about some events in the war and list the causes of them.You can also set reminders about what we can do better in the future.
DeleteHell yeah, Vietnam! Great topic my dude! A suggestion for you is too become an Infantryman so that you can really give a first person experience of the horrors of 'Nam. Or, maybe be a Brown Water Navy Sailor on a Patrol Torpedo Boat cruising the rivers of Vietnam! Make it first person though, the Vietnam conflict has so many great opportunities for descriptive language and good setting for characters! Awesome paragraph and awesome topic, my dude!
Deleteyou could do a first person from a solider who goes through all the pain in that war.
DeleteAn event we can learn from is Apollo 11’s flight to the moon. When President Kennedy told congress they should put a man on the moon, no one was sure if it could be done, but they focused on achieving that goal, and were successful. President John F. Kennedy gave a speech to a joint session of congress, in which he said “...This nation should commit itself to achieving the goal, before this decade is out, of landing a man on the moon…” The U.S. had been in a space race with Russia since the mid-50s and so landing a man on the moon would be a huge step forward, considering the USSR had already put a man in space. No one was entirely sure how it was going to get done, but they got to work. NASA launched several Apollo missions throughout the 60’s which all contributed to further exploration of space to help land on the moon. After much research and several tests, Apollo 11 launched from the Kennedy Space Center, and on July 20, 1969, Neil Armstrong and Edwin “Buzz” Aldrin set foot on the moon. This is just one example of how when we focus on achieving a goal instead of trying haphazardly, we can accomplish it.
ReplyDeleteOne way you could write your story is you could have the story in third person. Fliping back and forth from the lab with everyone tracking / watching the rocket. Then flip to the people in the rocket on their way to the moon. Another way you could write it is in first person. As someone watching in the lab the moon landing and describing everything they see and hear and how their working everything.
DeleteOre, in your short story I think you should have your short story in the third person view. This would give the reader knowledge on everything that is happening instead of one character's point of view. I also think that you should have your short story in the past tense to give many details of the rocket going to the lifting off, and explaining the journey as a narrator.
Delete1. Your main character could be someone who works in the "lab" that helped to land the first man on the moon. You would be able to shows how the event is experienced from a worker's point of view.
Delete2. I also think that you could have third person narration because it can display the emotions of the other worker's trying to make the mission successful.
9/11. A catastrophic time for america. Almost 3000 people died in the towers, 343 firefighters trying to save them, 4 planes, and 265 people on the plane. Many might blame al qaeda and their treacherous acts of terrorism for this catastrophe. But really ,we should be blaming hate for this. Al qaeda is a terrorist group that hates all americans and anything to do with them. Their religion, culture, and other things. So in short they hate america. Because they hated america they decided to send 19 hijackers into 4 planes to crash into important landmarks. Three of the planes succeeded in crashing into the landmarks killing many people including the hijackers. But one of them did not. It was headed for the capital. Washington D.C. But even though one of the planes didn’t succeed, it still killed everyone on the plane. So the hate of one terrorist group, led to the destruction of 3 important landmarks, 3,000 people, 19 hijackers, 343 firefighters, 4 planes, and 265 people on the planes. And all of this just because of the hate of one group.
ReplyDeleteI think that you should try adding more about Al Qaeda and what incouraged them to the action in the first place. You could also add in a part explaining how people were affected and how they responded to the Al Qaeda.
DeleteA message that we can learn from this is that hate can only lead to destruction.
DeleteMaybe you could explain why Al Qaeda hates America so much, and how they hijacked the planes.
DeleteMaybe you could explain why Al Qaeda hates America so much, and how they hijacked the planes.
DeleteThe great Depression started in 1930, after the biggest stock market crash in the western world. At it’s peak in 1933, nearly 13 million people were unemployed. Children, tired from finding jobs to sustain their families were forced to wait long treacherous hours in bread lines. Nearly HALF of the country’s banks failed. Wall street panicked, wages were pitiful, and almost everybody was in debt. In 1933, Franklin Delano Roosevelt took home a landslide victory against Herbert Hoover in the presidential election. He presented the “New Deal” which aided America a tremendously. It stabilized industry and agriculture. He reformed the financial system and regulated the stock market. Nearly 8.4 million jobs were opened. Soon, America would face it’s next biggest test as World War 2 was nearing and kicked American industry into high gear. Since the Great Depression occurred almost immediately after the Roaring 20’s, that is almost a lesson in itself. Everybody was so wound up in the pleasures of the world that they completely forgot anything bad could happen to them. No one was prepared for what could have happened. Always expect the unexpected. That is a lesson we can all apply to our lives. And when you do, think to yourself, what would I have done in that situation?
ReplyDeleteMy first suggestion to you is that your character should be a variety of people that were important to the Great Depression, like for example you could be one of the bank owners.
DeleteMy second suggestion to you is that you can go through all of your research and pull out the most things that you have for some of the banks that failed in the Western World. I also think that you could have a better understanding of the banks that failed. On the other hand this was a very good paragraph that I would have put for the Great Depression. Good job!
-Pete
Burhan, this paragraph is great but maybe more detail on how it affected the U.S. along with other countries and detail on what had to be done, by children or adults, to survive during this horrid time period. Also more detail on how the country got out of poverty so easily.
DeleteBurhan, I think you should do third person so that you can show what the Great Depression was like for different people with different jobs. Also, I think you should do flashbacks to when things were easier, before the Depression began. You can also incorporate a lot of details on how and why the stock market crashed.
DeleteIn the early 1950’s Vietnam splits into two nations North Vietnam a communist influenced half of Vietnam. And democratic half of Vietnam south Vietnam. The two nations wage war. With Russian help North Vietnam was a sure winner in the war as south vietnam was weak and had no allies. America outraged with Russia going in a full scale war america starts to aid south Vietnam with weapons and “advisers” (soldiers who went to Vietnam secretly to fight but the public was never told by the government.) After years of giving aid to the war America finally declares war and starts to fight with south Vietnam. In 1973 America signs a cease fire stopping all war for a 3 week long Vietnamese celebration. 2 weeks into the cease fire North Vietnam surprise attacks Saigon the capital of south Vietnam. The U.S. Military put up a strong fight but North Vietnam overtook the capital forcing the united states to surrender and flee.
ReplyDeleteBen-
DeleteMaybe you should make your story first person so you can express your feelings,opinions and so we can see how you felt about the war.
You should also maybe talk about how your family felt about the war in your story.
DeleteBen,
DeleteMaybe you could be a fighter in the war and explain your perspective. Maybe your setting could just start off in the war and how terrible war actually was.
Danielle
ReplyDeleteA good lesson we can learn is from the war of 1812, The British were enemies with France. America was trading goods with France, Britain were sinking the American ships that were trying to trade. America declared war on Britain but Britain already said they wouldn't sink the ships. James Madison (president at the time) declared the war but Britain got mad because they rushed into the war. America's army wasn't war ready at that time, America went to city of York in Ontario Canada and attacked. Then, British got mad at set threats on the white house James Madison and his wife Dolly fled to Maryland for safety. The British sailed to Washington and fought their way into the white house, Dinner was already set up so they decided to sit down eat then burn. General Cockburn was the head of the military and lit the first torch and lit the first lighting of the white house. This war ended with a peace treaty called the treaty of grant. That treaty stated that all land that was conquered was returned and there was a border between America and Canada. So, this shows that war/ violence doesn't solve anything.
You can set your story in America. You can show how your character lives in America during the war and you can explain your character's daily lifestyle and show what their thoughts and feelings are during this time period. Another suggestion that I have is that you can make your character have flashbacks and have them remember what their life was like before the time of war. Maybe they have someone who is off to war whom they remember a lot and that person impacts their life?
DeleteDanielle you should do a chapter from the novel and it could talk about the treaty and war ending. Also, you could have your setting in York and talk about how the Americans went to Canada and how you felt about it.
DeleteDanielle I think that in your story you should make your narration in 1st person and then make them talk about the war and explain their main conflict and how they felt in their experience and what were the fears your character had.
DeleteDanielle I think that in your story you should make your narration in 1st person and then make them talk about the war and explain their main conflict and how they felt in their experience and what were the fears your character had.
DeleteThings that have happened in our history help us prepare for the future and teach us lessons. One example is Prohibition during the 1920s.
ReplyDeleteProhibition failed in many ways one of them being it was meant to decrease crime, Some towns even sold their jails but it ended up increasing crime because people wanted to their drink alcohol. There were many bootleggers and organized criminals illegally selling alcohol. It helped create organized crime like gangsters in the 1920s.
Prohibition taught the government not to take people’s rights. Don't take peoples rights away because it will just make things worse. People will riot and people will get hurt or killed over it. The lesson we can learn is don't take away people's free choice.
So in conclusion don't take away people's rights in the future. Prohibition was a good example of what happens when you do so.
Leo Vasilakos
Leo great paragraph but I have some suggestions. Your character should be a gangster who drank and sold alcohol. I think you should write a novel and tell it in 1st person because you could explane what it was like and it is over a period of few years. But it is up to you.
DeleteNice job Leo, but I have a few suggestions. I think your main character should be a cop, overwhelmed by the new high amounts of crime and like that story, have your police chief get caught in a raid.
DeleteThere's lot of possibilities with this topic, Leo. I have a couple of suggestions for you. Your story could be told in first person, maybe from someone like Al Capone, remember he was well known, he had his own club and tunnels for transporting alcohol illegally. You could have some type of flashback to when it all began and how people felt when they first found out.
DeleteOn October 24th 1929, the stock market crashed. People lost their jobs, which was their only source of income. Hunger and homelessness were common. People sold their cars for money. In 1931, president Herbert Hoover said that the worst was behind them. He couldn't be more wrong. Poverty began to grow, and by 1933, there were over 15 million citizens without jobs. In 1932, Franklin Roosevelt was elected the successor of Hoover. He promised he would help the country, and he did. He knew no time could be wasted, and created the New Deal. We can learn from this travesty, that things will always get better, but we have to make them happen
ReplyDelete1. What is the main conflict in this time period you would like to inquire and explore about in your fiction.
Delete2. Give some details on the politcs and what your opinion was on them.
First off great paragraph. One suggestion I have for you is that you can have your main character be a kid of someone in poverty. Going through the struggles of school and having your parents not happy and scared. Maybe you could make them a little kid so their parents being scared makes them very scared. Another suggestion I have is be a single parent that just got divorced in poverty. They could have 5 kids and be under a lot of pressure. My next suggestion is have a character that is not in poverty and struggles to make friends because he or she thinks everyone is trying to use them. My final suggestion is to have a parent that is still working but is under a lot of stress because if they don’t get enough work done they could be fired, but at the same time they don’t feel like they are spending enough time with their kids.
DeleteGreat job Rachel. I think you should do your story as a novel and just submit a chapter. You should also do it in first person. Your main character should be a little girl who was once rich and now she is poor due to the stock market crash and now she is poor and she has to adapt to her new environment. You should also talk about how the main conflict shaped out the rest of your character's life.
DeleteOn the morning of September 11, 2001 the U.S. was attacked by 19 Al Qaeda terrorists.This day will be enstoned in every American’s mind, for this day enraged America. The attacks started at 8:45 am on September 11, 2001. At precisely 8:46 am American Airlines flight 11 was purposely flown into the north tower of the world trade center. Approximately 17 minutes later United Airlines flight 175, which had 65 innocent people were on board, hits the south tower. Ironically the south tower collapsed before the north tower fell. The attacks caused a blackout in lower Manhattan. Unfortunately New York City wasn’t the only place that was attacked. United Airlines flight 93 was hijacked, and crashed into a field in Pennsylvania. The aircraft didn’t hit any major building, but a lot of innocent people died. The fourth plane involved was flown into the Pentagon. The terrorist groups targeted the world trade center because it was a symbol of America’s economic power. The extremists also targeted the Pentagon, for it is a symbol of America’s military power. But the main reason that compelled the extremist’s to carry out the attacks was because America supported Israel in the Gulf War, and because of the overall military presence in the Middle East. We can absolutely learn a lesson to apply to our future. That lesson is be more vigilant about which country our military lends its support to in foreign wars. Because as you can see if the military backs a country that another country doesn’t like than that other country might retaliate. Another lesson is to have better security at airport terminals to ensure that no terrorists can board our planes.
ReplyDeleteThis includes a ton of details from the time, however I think that you can make your lesson have a massive impact on the story. For example, in your story you can have a situation where they let a terrorist on board.
DeleteThis was very well thought out and it included lots of detail, but I think in your story, you could add more things about the people instead of Al Qaeda and the effect it had on them.
DeleteYou did a great job with detail, and you seem to know a lot about 9/11
Delete-Your story should be in first person, readers can get into the thoughts of your character
-I think you should talk about pop culture in the 2000s, it'll make your story more believable.
On September 11, 2001, 3,000 people were killed from 19 terrorists who smuggled box cutters through airport security and hijacked four planes and crashing them into the twin towers, the pentagon and into a field in Shanksville Pennsylvania. At the twin towers at 8:45am the north tower got hit with a plane carrying 20,000 gallons of jet fuel and 9:02am the south tower was hit with another plane also carrying 20,000 gallons of jet fuel. According to Ron Paul, “America is to blame for 9/11. American intervention in the middle-east is the main motivation behind the 9/11 attacks. This may be part of it because when you intervene in another in another country, they are going to push back.” On 9/11 400 police officers and firefighters were killed. When the towers went down, 91 fire trucks were buried in the rubble. When the towers went down the debris set fires to world trade 4, 5, 6 and 7. World trade 7 housing the city's command center burned unchecked for seven hours and then collapsed at 5:20pm. One of the planes to be hijacked was flight 93 and on the flight, once they heard what was going on in New York they realized that the plane they were on was targeting another popular place, so they took a vote and decided to fight back. We can learn not to intervene in other countries unless we know they can’t harm us in the U.S.A. for safety we should keep our security in the airports and be more aware.
ReplyDeleteMaybe you should use a setting in the twin towers. You should also probably use first person narration.
DeleteGood job! I think you should do first person and third person narration. For third person you could be bouncing back between two characters, one in a state far away and one in the towers. Or for first person you could be someone in one of the planes, talking about what you hear and see.
DeleteAlex I like your idea 9/11 is a tragic moment in history and you did a really nice job explaining it, I would suggest
Delete1 maybe you could be a fire fighter or a police officer
2 maybe you should be somebody on the plane the went into the the field
On May 22,2011 the sky got dark and a multi vortex tornado from a supercell rips through joplin missouri. There were 8 tornado in missouri that day from a tornado outbreak.the tornado went 2 miles and life behind a path of destruction.the tornado length was 21.62 the width was 1600 feet wide there was a lot of damage. The tornado was very powerful it was a ef-5.
ReplyDeleteJen,in your story I think that you should:
Delete1. have your stroy in first person.
2. the first person narator should be the main character, and the main character should be a storm chaser.
You should make your character 3rd person.Let them be someone who knows about the storm.They should be someone who gets information about the storm.In your story tell what damage the storm did and how it affects the characters and setting.
DeleteYou should make your character 3rd person.Let them be someone who knows about the storm.They should be someone who gets information about the storm.In your story tell what damage the storm did and how it affects the characters and setting.
DeleteI feel that your character should be someone who lived in Missouri when one tornado struck and the character experienced the tornado but lived to tell the story. If you do this type of story I feel first person would work out best because you can go into detail of how the character feels.
DeleteI feel that your character should be someone who lived in Missouri when one tornado struck and the character experienced the tornado but lived to tell the story. If you do this type of story I feel first person would work out best because you can go into detail of how the character feels.
DeleteFrom our history, we have learned important lessons that help prepare us for the future. My research topic was Alaska’s Largest earthquake. This major event had a huge impact on how to predict future earthquakes.
ReplyDeleteIt happened on March 27, 1964. It was dangerous and deadly. This earthquake was the largest ever recorded in US History. It was a Magnitude of 9.2 and lasted 4.5 minutes. The earthquake then caused a tsunami which was even more devastating. It caused damage worth 300 to 400 million dollars.
They needed systems to track earthquakes, so more people can survive. They didn’t have this at that time. They weren’t warned that the earthquake was coming. If they had been warned, it wouldn’t had been as bad.
See, if we understand how these earthquakes happen, it makes it possible to predict them. Then people can be warned and they can prepare to be able to deal with these events better. These events from the past helped us for the future!
I think it would be a good idea to be a serviver of the earthquake in the past tense for the narrator.I also think that you should later describe present earthquake prodicting devises and an example were it made a big difference in it's impact.
DeleteBrian-
DeleteYour narrations should be 1st person, and a character suggestion you could do is like a homeless person that experienced the earthquake and was a hero for saving people. Also your narrator is in 1st person and you should be telling the reader your emotions and feelings during the quake, and what a persons emotional reaction was to you saving him or her.
Brian,
DeleteI think you should have your story about how you felt and why you felt that way. Maybe why you were at Alaska like where you born there? Make sure you have lots of information on you.
Thank you.
In 1969, America put man on the moon. This was done after a lot of hard work and dedication. President Kennedy gave a speech in the early '60s saying "This nation should commit itself to achieving the goal before the decade is out of landing on the moon..." Neil Armstrong (Commander), Buzz Aldrin (Lunar Module Pilot) and Michael Collins (Commander Module Pilot) were the three brave men that entered Apollo 11 on July 16th, 1969. 4 days later, they landed in the Sea of Tranquility on July 20th, 1969. Although, While approaching the moon, a warning sounded. The shuttle was running out of fuel, and fast. When the shuttle touched down on the moon there was exactly 18 seconds of fuel left. The Eagle landed 1.5 minutes earlier than expected land time and about 4 miles away from the predicted land point. The men spent 21 hours, 18 minutes and 35 seconds on the moon. We can learn many things from this time in history. If you put your mind to something, you can do wonderful things. Parts of it may go wrong, but in the end, the result will make you so proud. It can be scary, but trying to do these things and putting your mind to it can make you a better person. I think that the Moon landing was one of the most beneficial times for people in this world because it showed them that you can do anything... and that we humans are amazing.
ReplyDeleteMorgan,Great job! For your story your charecter could be one of the people in NASA, or one of the people watching them land on the moon,an alein. Also your setting is depended on what your charecter is. If your charecter is working at NASA the setting would be in NASA.I don't know who or what your charecter is, becuase you could be an alien, so this might not be any help. But you should express how your charecter feels. Is going to the moon the best thing to ever happen or the worst?
DeleteMorgan, really good job I think your story should be told in 3rd person so the reader can get feelings from more than one point of view. I think your setting should be the moon. But it all depends on what you decide to make your character. Your character could be an astronaut who lands on the moon. But it's up to you and have fun doing it.
DeleteMorgan, really good job I think your story should be told in 3rd person so the reader can get feelings from more than one point of view. I think your setting should be the moon. But it all depends on what you decide to make your character. Your character could be an astronaut who lands on the moon. But it's up to you and have fun doing it.
DeleteMorgan, this paragraph is awesome so far! I think that if some quotes were added, the reader could relate to the feelings of the astronauts. Also if you added some detail on how this affected the astronaut's families.
DeleteWho would be such a genius to cut and rip open a human’s veins and let the patients bleed to death? Then fill their empty, lifeless body with Calomel, a form of mercury. This method was used to let a disease escape from a human. Luckily brains and minds knew this was killing more people then getting rid of the disease. But even when the public thought this as a joke, doctors and barbers used quackery to fool innocent creatures like you and me. Lies actually brought more money than you’d think. More patients, more money, more fame, and the cycle goes on and on. Soon the public caught on to the tricks and new forms of medication were created such as Homeopathy and Osteopathy. A German doctor named Samuel Hahnemann started Homeopathy. Hahnemann believed that small doses of prescribed medication should be given with water. Osteopathy was started by Andrew Taylor Still and it used body manipulations and didn’t use drugs. These manipulations are affected by a magnetic flow to keep the blood going. Both Homeopathy and Osteopathy were to help the public and stop heroic medication. Filling the body with mercury, taking out all the blood in humans, and exposing them to high toxins. In the 18th century, Hermann Boerhaave researched disease and had theories about why people got sick because salty, putrid, and oily conditions in the body. He tried to sweeten the acid and purify the stomach. This system of medication was commonly used by doctors in colonial times. A lesson we can learn from this is that don’t try to fool the public and be kind to the people whom you live with.
ReplyDeleteFor your paragraph you should maybe include a little more information on the lesson that can be learned. Another suggestion is to include a little less gory language.
DeleteYou should have a 1st person story as a doctor of trickery so that you can describe the procedures. Or you can be a doctor who helped by using methods that worked. You should also be related to a person that was killed by the fake procedure.
DeleteThe Prohibitionists envisioned that outlawing alcohol would lower crime In all. But the exact opposite happened “neither Federal or local authorities would commit the resources necessary to enforce the Volstead act”. Plus with the rise of the mafia in the 1920`s and them bribing the local law to use business bootleggers were able to bring in alcohol and sell alcohol with ease and there empire making over 9 million dollars a year.There were a lot of downsides to outlawing alcohol The people who were alcoholics needed and depended on it, Now people who need alcohol or want it on a special occasion (typically wealthy people) now need to commit a crime a risk all of their money a wealth. All because the government can't get over that alcohol can be bad just like everything else if you use to much of it or take too much of it. I think what we can take away from this could be that don't take away the things that some people need and some just want it to relax sometimes or when there on a date or get home from a long day at work.
ReplyDeleteI think that you have a good idea in mind. I think for your story you should have a character that is an alcoholic since your lesson is that we shouldn't take things away from people that they need. You should have your story show the bad affects on the alchoholic after the alcohol has become illegal. I think you should have your story be in First-person narration, because I don't think you need to talk about other characters thoughts to get your point/lesson across. Good Job!
DeleteThis is a really good idea! I think you should do this in first person narration. Maybe you want your character to be dealing illegally with the alcohol but then they could get caught and will have to face the consequences; which will help you explain your lesson. Good job!
Delete1) You should create a character that is very involved with alcohol and/or the illegal selling of it. You should use this to give us your characters opinion of the prohibition, and give us a personal account of what happened.
Delete2) You could also use third person narration to let the reader see the issue from multiple perspectives. Such as why the government prohibited alcohol, or how other people are affected, (the rich, the poor....)
Everyone is equal. A big issue in the world right now in inequality. The holocaust for example, was huge in inequality! Also slavery, another huge subject in inequality. In the holocaust six million people were killed just because of their religion. Also they nearly killed 2 out of every 3 European Jews. As well as at least 200,000 disables patients they killed!
ReplyDeleteIn slavery African Americans were being bought to become someone’s “property”, their owners hurt them and they had no way to fight back. They were weak, they were constantly working for other people. Also not to mention kids were separated from their parents, families ripped apart. No one should be treated based on color, size and or religion!
Angelina, is your character coming from the halocaust? I really like how you are writing aout the halocaust but you connect it with slavery. ( because they are alike) Great job on this paragraph! I think you have a great idea on this topic.
DeleteYour opening is extremely sophisticated and engaging. And it really
DeleteDoes introduces background information in a subtle way.you do have elements of the
Plot line,, and many other elements of fiction
The paragraph introduces a lot of details to expose the time period or event.
The message is very engaging and has lots of perfect detail. I extremely loved it so much angelina
GREAT JOB
An example a history that we must learn, to do better is secrecy and trust , secrecy between nations and trust so that no one will live in fear. But between the US and the soviet union there was a constant fear, no trust and secrecy that caused the two nations to threaten each other with nuclear war and then the Cold War was started. So the lesson we must work from is to make allies before we are threatened into fear because, “You are the product of everything you fear” do we want to be the outcome of our enemies.
ReplyDeleteI think you should describe what exactly started the cold war. Why were we not allies or even friends, and why do we need secrecy?
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DeleteI think you should do first person narration, the person could be someone from whoever started the war.
Delete1. Santiago, I feel that you should do this in 3rd person. This I think that it would be easier for you to build your story- in 3rd person.
Delete2. Maybe in your final piece you can explain what the cold war is, and why things like secrecy and trust are so important.
3.Good job with the quote, it gave some back-up support of you lesson. Maybe you could include a quote from a great person in your HF piece. You could pretend that your main character knows that great person.
Great Job and Good Luck!
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DeleteOne big lesson that we can use to help us in the future is the 9/11 Attacks. These attacks were one of the worst attacks to ever happen in the United States Of America. 19 terrorists easily snuck box cutters and knives through TSA security checkpoints in three different east coast airports and boarded 4 flights bound for California. The reason they boarded the flights headed for California was because they had a lot of fuel. Once they took over the two planes they headed toward the World Trade Centers. New York City didn't know what was about to hit them. Once the World Trade Centers Got hit, all heck broke lose. Both towers were fully destroyed, and all of the United States was devastated. From this huge tragedy we can take away one thing that would help prepare us for the future. We need to have better security and always be prepared.
ReplyDeleteMy first suggestion to you is that you use 3rd person narration so you can involve other people's feelings and reactions. My second suggestion is that you use present tense narrations.
DeleteMy suggestions are:
Delete1) you should have a first person narration and have them on the streets of NYC
2) you should have a chapter, and in that chapter it could show when the towers were hit
Great paragraph bod.
DeleteMy suggestions for you good sir:
1 Maybe do a third person, and switch between the main character and someone else, a companion perhaps?
2 Do a short story that begins on September 10th to show how the day was good and the world was fine, then go into September 11th so that people can see that anything can go wrong at any moment.
The Great Depression gives us many lessons like don’t give up and be happy with what you have. Bu what I think is the most important lesson we can learn is to push through the rough times. The Great Depression lasted for over a decade, and people had to live though the ten years. They had no jobs, no money or really anything. All of them pushed through day after long day. No matter what happened the day before or what’s going to happen. Everyone pushed through even when there seemed to be no hope.
ReplyDeleteI think you should have a first person narration in your story so the readers know exctly how the main charecter feels. I also think that you should have a chapter of a novel in your story.
DeleteFirst of all, your lesson is amazing, and you can do many things in your story with it. This relates to what Shreya said, but I agree that it should be first person, so that the reader can experience what it was like to keep hopes high up. To emphasize on how bad the Great Depression was, you could have your character skip meals even if they are hungry, or sell their property for money.
DeleteI think for your story you should do a child or teen experiencing the Great Depression. This way we can see how someone like would have gone through this time. You could also have your character live in the dust bowl where conditions were worse so we could see the added struggles of living there.
DeleteThe Titanic was known as the unsinkable. Built in 1912, the Titanic was the best of it’s time, but when disaster struck, the Titanic was doomed. Over 3,000 people including passengers and crew were on the ship, but only 712 survived. Everyone thought that the Titanic wouldn’t sink, so they only put 16 lifeboats on the ship. The 16 lifeboats could only fit 1,178 people on them in total. If anything happened, only ⅓ of the people would survive. At 12:40 am, April 15th, they started launching the lifeboats, but they weren’t completely filled. Many passengers didn’t want to believe that the Titanic was sinking so they stood idle in their rooms. The sinking of the Titanic was unheard of and many people’s lives were taken all because they didn’t plan for the worst. The amount of deaths caused by the Titanic could have been lowered if the creators planned for the worst. The next time there's a storm or your traveling, plan for the worst just in case the worst happens.
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DeleteI think that you should have your story in 1st person, because the readers will know what the charactar thinks and feels. Also I would have a short story because the sinking of the Titanic is only less than a day. In your chapter or short story (whichever you choose) be very descriptive of your setting, especially if you are in upper class.
1. Talk about the infrastructure of the ship
Delete2. When you start to develop your story talk about some of the actions that your character is doing or deciding abut
3. Talk about the crew and what they did in order to save lives
4. Where were you in the ship when it started to sink were you one of the people who died/didn't think it would sink or even the person who sacrificed him/her in order to save the people around them
I Feel like your character should have seen the ice berg coming and try to warn someone about it
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